it remains

[Alca-diddly-doo]

Click

Not something I usually do and you'll see why when you click that link.

[Blink]

I'm sorry but I'm not too fond of it.

I do not a see a pattern in rhythm, sound, rhyme, diction, or any other things found in most poems.

This looks more to me like some wise words on time rather a poem.

[Alca-diddly-doo]

Poems don't necessarily have to have rhythm or rhyme.

[gray929]

I think it has a great message, a bit choppy but flows well nonetheless. Nice job!

[Alca-diddly-doo]

Thank you Gray.

[Ancient]

Are you kidding me? A poem must have rhythm, it doesn't have to necessarily rhyme, but what I'm saying it should have lyrical expression with points connected to each other touching the hearts and minds of all readers.

I agree with Blink when he says "This looks more to me like some wise words on time rather a poem.", sorry.

[Alca-diddly-doo]

Ehh no, I'm sorry.. But there are plenty of poems are there with no rhyme or rythm.. It doesn't need to have these, it really just needs a point, colliding stanzas with a similar concept in each..

[Ancient]

Rhythm doesn't necessarily mean rhyme.. I agree with the fact poems don't have to rhyme, in fact, the best ones don't, but they do need to have some type of rhythm to connect the whole thing together (a.k.a. colliding stanzas with a similar concept in each).

[Alca-diddly-doo]

Yes, and mine has that.

[Kahless]

I like it, and from somebody who has studied poetry, it docent need rhythm or rhyme to be a poem, I can give you a list of poets who write in a style lacking both

youtube.com/watch?v=iuTNdHadwbk

Billy Collins, former US Poet Laureate and one of America's best-selling poets

[Alca-diddly-doo]

Thank you Andrew.

And I like that poem, The Dead.

[Ancient]

Alrighty then..